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Haema of The Eight (Feedback Wanted)


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Firstname - Haema

Surname - N/A

Title - Of the Eight, Primate

Sex - Female

Race - Nord

Age - 26, born on 16th Sun's Dawn, 2E560

Occupation - Priest

Faction - The Eight Divines, Glory of The Eight

Appearance - Haema wears a white robe, which brings out the colour of her shoulder-length rose blonde hair. Her sea blue eyes are very attractive. Her skin is pure and unscathed.

Personality - Haema is kind, forgiving and loving. She gives much of her gold away to beggars on the streets.

Social Background/Backstory - "She now believes that she is chosen by the Divines. Whether others choose to believer her or not, is truly based on their opinion. According to her, Akatosh whispered in her ear. He said, "Be Divine, and unite all. Number more than eight, and don't be late. Do your duty, and heed the commands of the saints and priests. Find my amulet, and rebuild." However, no one knows if this was Akatosh. However, the last bit at the end, "Find my amulet" suggests that it was Akatosh. She says she prayed all day, from 7am, until 7pm and then she finally heard his voice, or so she says. After explaining what happened, she lost a fair bit of support... A lot of support. However, some did believe her (Main the other priests) and told her she was destined for greater rather than a basic job working in a city. And so, she left for Skyrim. That was when she decided she had a 'Divine Duty' to fulfil, and no one was going to stop her."

-Extract from her back story

Best Memory - Haema's best memory was when she became Primate, however, she soon left this job, but still carries the title.

Worst Memory - Haema's worst memory was when she found her father, dead.

Skills - She is adept in restoration magic, and is also practising in a few of the other schools of magic. She is a very talented priest, and is good at converting.

Challenges for the Character - To discover if Akatosh really did speak to her.

Birthsign - Serpent

Religious Views - Haema worships the Eight.

Politics Views - Haema believes that only someone who has a very strong faith in the Eight, particuarly Akatosh, should become Emperor, and that all should follow.




Note - This character is not, and will NOT, be a Mary Sue. It is for very open and opinionated RP. It introduces a whole factor of how people will RP with her, and I will NEVER give evidence whether Akatosh spoke to her or not, so we can remain interesting, and unique. There is also a guild, which, when the game is released, she will run. I have already set up a site for it. It is called Glory of The Eight, and you can find out more by messaging me, or looking for in in the guilds section.

Thanks for reading, and I hope you leave a bit of feedback.


"The Morag Tong: Exciting thrills, and bloody spills"

- Svadas Vendal



"Akatosh, Arkay, Dibella, Julianos, Kynareth, Mara, Stendarr, Zenithar. The Eight made our world, and they made you."

- Haema of The Eight
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Post #120098
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I like this character, nice job.


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This is probably a little bit over-the-top, but what if you made it so it wasn't Akatosh who really spoke to her? Maybe she's schizophrenic, and slightly deranged because of it? Or maybe she takes a really defensive view when someone questions her faith?

Just some ideas that came to my head while reading. You don't need to change anything really, you've got a good character here.


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(December 1st 2013 05:34 AM)Iogairn Wrote:  This is probably a little bit over-the-top, but what if you made it so it wasn't Akatosh who really spoke to her? Maybe she's schizophrenic, and slightly deranged because of it? Or maybe she takes a really defensive view when someone questions her faith?

Just some ideas that came to my head while reading. You don't need to change anything really, you've got a good character here.

And that is EXACTLY why I wanted a character like this. Always wanted to RP schizophrenic... Maybe this will be my chance, eventually... Though probably not, my characters tend to be basic, so someone interesting couldn't hurt.


"The Morag Tong: Exciting thrills, and bloody spills"

- Svadas Vendal



"Akatosh, Arkay, Dibella, Julianos, Kynareth, Mara, Stendarr, Zenithar. The Eight made our world, and they made you."

- Haema of The Eight
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I really like how you made it so it's a mystery whether Akatosh spoke to her or not, I've seen lots of people who created characters that are "the chosen of the divines/Daedric princes" and who apparently chat with said immortal beings at whim. Very nice job avoiding that while still getting the same "point", for lack of a better word, across.

I do think the appearance could use some more detail like height, build, defining characteristics (scars, birthmarks etc)... that sort of stuff. The personality could also use some more details, right now you've done a good job of portraying what type of person she is but I think you should go into a bit more detail like stuff that bothers her.

Lastly while the bio is very good I think that it could be expanded to earlier parts of her life like where she was born and raised up until ESO time which is what you have now.


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(December 1st 2013 08:41 AM)Took an arrow in the knee Wrote:  I really like how you made it so it's a mystery whether Akatosh spoke to her or not, I've seen lots of people who created characters that are "the chosen of the divines/Daedric princes" and who apparently chat with said immortal beings at whim. Very nice job avoiding that while still getting the same "point", for lack of a better word, across.

I do think the appearance could use some more detail like height, build, defining characteristics (scars, birthmarks etc)... that sort of stuff. The personality could also use some more details, right now you've done a good job of portraying what type of person she is but I think you should go into a bit more detail like stuff that bothers her.

Lastly while the bio is very good I think that it could be expanded to earlier parts of her life like where she was born and raised up until ESO time which is what you have now.

I haven't gone too far in to the appearance, but I was very specific with the birhtsign. The Serpent is what people who are "Very Blessed, or Very Cursed" are born under, so it made that... Quite unique. I will begin to expand as time goes on, though, and thanks for the feedback.


"The Morag Tong: Exciting thrills, and bloody spills"

- Svadas Vendal



"Akatosh, Arkay, Dibella, Julianos, Kynareth, Mara, Stendarr, Zenithar. The Eight made our world, and they made you."

- Haema of The Eight
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Post #120142
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I meant the birthmark as in the mark on your skin, I noticed the birthsign yes and it's a rather interesting choice considering she's a priest.


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Post #120159
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Yes, yes, I know... But I said I will get more in to her appearance later on. I just wanted to state what the birthsign meant, for those who come to read this, and wondered why she would have a birthsign which isn't dedicated to a month.


"The Morag Tong: Exciting thrills, and bloody spills"

- Svadas Vendal



"Akatosh, Arkay, Dibella, Julianos, Kynareth, Mara, Stendarr, Zenithar. The Eight made our world, and they made you."

- Haema of The Eight
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