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Mithtar Spellbinder


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Name: Mithtar Spellbinder
Age: 70
Race: Altmer
Ocupation: mage, adveture, enchanter.
Birth sign: mage
Faction: Aldmeri Dominion. Long live the Queen!!!

Physical discription: Mithtar is 5'11 quite a bit shorter than most of his high elf kin. with young fetures looking to be no more than 18 to humans. he has hair as black as night short and curly falling over the tips of his pointed ears. with the bright green eyes of the high elves. his skin is fair golden from long hours indoors practicing magic from child hood. he has a warm frendly smile. he has bulked up in recent years gaining some muscle from his new traning with a srowd. he is almost always seen wearing his blue and white robes with silver trim, with a slender elven short sword at his hip.

Personality: kind and good hearted Mithtar always tries to see the best in others. he has a great passion for knolge and bettering him self and others never acepting anything less than 110%. he is wise beyond his years and always want to learn more eger and ditermeined. at times he can be foolish putting him self in situations he should have stayed out of or prepaired more for being over confidint in his power as a mage. He also has a great distrust of humans.

Backstory: Mithar's Family lived in the south of Cyrodiil on a manor not to far north of the border with Valenwood. Both of his parents and his older sibling were powerfull mages and they started his traning from the age of six. Mithtar proved be extremly talented in the arts of distruction and conjueration. he contued his study of these magics progressing ever more quickly grasping even abstract conseptes with ease. By the age of 18 he had become an Adept of destruction and adept in conuration. The years passed with Mithtar growing in power and knowlge. At 23 his older brother Saumon left for the summerset isles to study with the psijics. At 30 Mithtar expert destruction magic the pride his parents felt could not be described. But Mithtar soon became bored with the restrictions and day to day life he soon left his home traveling through the provinces in seek of greater knowlge and rooting out dedra worshipers where ever he found them. the last years of these explorations he spent in Skyrim and studying at the college of Winter Hold it was there that he master the destruction school at the age of 56. He returned to his home in Cyrodiil at 59. Rather than a warm welcome he was greeted by the distain and blame. in the time Mithtar had been gone a cult of dedra worshipers had attacked the manor Killing his father. And taking with them many valuable tomes. Saumon Mithtar's brother blamed him for not being here to help. threats where exchanged and Mithtar left for summerset to visit his mother who left for their remaining family in summerset. With the break out of the war Mithtar stands ready to serve his queen.

Religious views: not the most religious he questions the adrea they do nothing while the dedra kill us, and toy with us.

Political view: mirrors that of his queen he is always ready to do what she commands.

P.s. sorry for miss spelling's I have dyslexia. Hope you like it.
This post was last modified: September 26th 2013 10:11 AM by Mithtar Spellbinder
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Iogairn
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First of all: bro-fist for being Dyslexic. I'm Dyspraxic but hey, it all boils down to the same thing really...

The mistake you're making is one a lot of people make to start with: your character is a bit 'over the top'. I mean, at 25 he's a master of destruction. Bearing in mind it takes hours of gameplay to get that, it will seem like your character is almost god-like with his powers. Also, it might be boring for you personally if you get into a scrap in an RP and all you need to do is wave your hand and they burn to ashes.
I would also recommend that you turn the story about the grimoire into a story (in the library). It seems like it's less about the characters background and more of something that happened to the character. There's a subtle difference. There's a handy thread in the Role-play discussion thread for a grammar/spelling check if you want, where people will go through your story and correct the grammar. Feel free to use that.

But I'm focusing on the negatives here. I tend to do that. You've got the makings of a really good character here, and it's just the detail that needs sorting out.


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Triskele
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(September 17th 2013 10:29 AM)Iogairn Wrote:  First of all: bro-fist for being Dyslexic. I'm Dyspraxic but hey, it all boils down to the same thing really...

The mistake you're making is one a lot of people make to start with: your character is a bit 'over the top'. I mean, at 25 he's a master of destruction. Bearing in mind it takes hours of gameplay to get that, it will seem like your character is almost god-like with his powers. Also, it might be boring for you personally if you get into a scrap in an RP and all you need to do is wave your hand and they burn to ashes.
I would also recommend that you turn the story about the grimoire into a story (in the library). It seems like it's less about the characters background and more of something that happened to the character. There's a subtle difference. There's a handy thread in the Role-play discussion thread for a grammar/spelling check if you want, where people will go through your story and correct the grammar. Feel free to use that.

But I'm focusing on the negatives here. I tend to do that. You've got the makings of a really good character here, and it's just the detail that needs sorting out.

Thanks for the advice I'm new to this when I get a chance I go back and edit the time line and story thanks please look at it again when I'm done
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Props for making such an extensive bio even though letters are a bit scary to you! Iogairn already covered what I wanted to say really; you have a good character going and all it needs it some sculpting here and there :) Not to plug my own stuff, but I recently wrote an article to help out people who are new to creating characters, have a look, it might help!

http://www.tesof.com/topic-building-a-ch...et-started




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(September 17th 2013 02:50 PM)Triskele Wrote:  Props for making such an extensive bio even though letters are a bit scary to you! Iogairn already covered what I wanted to say really; you have a good character going and all it needs it some sculpting here and there :) Not to plug my own stuff, but I recently wrote an article to help out people who are new to creating characters, have a look, it might help!

http://www.tesof.com/topic-building-a-ch...et-started

Thanks for the help I take a look soon and try to improve it as best I can
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I think i fixed it now hope it sounds more realistic.
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