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Nehemia Kinslayer: Re-union volumes I & II


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Volume I: The arrival

The air is rigid and deadly, its bitterness is infused by a harshly blowing wind. The sun had been covered by dark clouds for the whole day, and now that the night is dominating the night sky, it makes little difference to men in terms of light.

Nehemia approaches a small tomb in the marches with a torch in his hand. With slow foot steps he arrives to the tomb's entrance. He extends the torch forward to shed some light to the moss covered writing. He pulls his hood down and begins to rip off the moss that covers the writing decorating the entrance.

"The entrance is shut. It was made for those who have been betrayed. The betrayed linger here. The way is shut. Only the living may enter. The entrance is shut. Only the living may leave"

Nehemia exhales loudly through his nose. He places his hand on the heavy, iron made door and pushes. The door refuses to move. He slams the door with full force of a tackle, the door refuses to move. Nehemia sighs and takes a seat on top of a large urn that had fallen over.

After staring at the door for a while. He begins to roll his eyes. "Surely you wouldn't give me riddles would you?" He ponders out loud. He shifts his eyes at the decorated writing. "I sincerely hope this is some form of..." He lifts himself up from the urn and stares at the weather outside. He sees an source of light down on the road. With haste he makes his way outside the tombs entrance and yells out "Oi! Traveler, quickly! There's shelter here!"

He sees the source of light becoming immobile, and after a while. The man with a torch closes in on the tomb.

"Nasty weather. Ain't it" The traveler speaks to Nehemia. Nehemia nods deep. "Indeed it is, come, I was just about to enjoy the comforting warmth of fire." The traveler passes Nehemia and walks into front of the door. "A tomb?" The man turns around to look at Nehemia. And the moment he does so, Nehemia pushes the man through the door.

"Figures. These things are often self-explanatory." Nehemia speaks to the confused traveller. "Now, I must insist you hold still, we wouldn't want the door to close would we?" Having said that, Nehemia unsheathes his sword and stabs the traveler to the chest. "Stay put." He walks to the large urn, grabs it and carries it to the tomb's door, placing it on top of the travelers corpse. "There, perfect." He grabs his torch and enters the tomb.


Volume I: The mark of the Betrayer


Nehemia arrives to an hallway, he peers around with the light of his torch. There's a large, unlit brazier in middle of the room. Nehemia stares at his feet whilst walking towards it. He notices a glyph in one of the tiles and carefully leaps over it. When he reaches the brazier he takes off his left glove and slowly places his fingers to the brazier. "Oil." He thought and brought the torch to ignite the oil. The flames burst as the light fills the room, and the shadows begin dancing on ceiling and the walls.

Nehemia makes a slow, complete turn as he observes the decorated writings filling the walls. "On this day-" The date has worn off. ".. Four young set forth on a rite of passage. These young were called by the names of Skjol Bear-Arm, Gold-haired Faras, Yrim Snowpaw and-" The name had been scratched to unreadable state. "They set north east of the clan Bear-Arm's village. Each and everyone of them completed the rites. Yet for one of them that deemed no glory, as he in the mad hour of his betrayal slayed the other young. The man was cursed with the title of Kinslayer. May the stain on his name never to be lifted. Here is the final resting place of the young. It is in our hopes that they will not haunt these halls of this very tomb, but rest in peace."

Nehemia smiles. He places the glove in his hand and throws the torch to his left. He unsheathes his sword and continues forward. Upon stepping outside of the room to yet another hallway, a ghastly voice echoes: "The dead linger here. Who dares to disturb?"

Nehemia assumes fighting stance and waits. He patiently stares towards the end of the tomb. After standing there for a while in complete silence, he presses forward.

Nehemia enters another room, again holding the torch he stares at the tiles and avoids the booby traps. As he figured, there was another brazier in middle of the room. Waiting to be lit.

The light fills the room, but instead of writings, the walls were covered with paintings. Nehemia recognized four characters, a painting of battle, and a man holding three heads in front of the villagers. A trial, and a image of a man shooed away from the village. His smile withers.

A shiver is sent down Nehemia's spine as another ghastly voice speaks: "No rest for the dead, for their fury unmatched." Nehemia steps around the room waiting for someone to attack him. No one arrived.

Continuing forward, Nehemia sliced down spider webs as he continued to the main hall. Upon entering he saw two gutters made of stone on his right and left side. He placed his torch on the left one. Oil bursted to flames and followed the gutter. Bringing forth light to the left side of the main hall. He repeated the same on the right one, and the whole room was lit. The main hall steep but narrow, it continued dozens of meters, and the back it opened to a large circular wall that seemed to support a dome in the ceiling. At the back of the circular wall were three sealed graves. Nehemia cautiously begun to approach the end of the hall, as he felt something grabbing him from his shoulder.


Volume II

Coming soon.
This post was last modified: February 15th 2013 01:48 PM by Nehemia


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I felt goosebumps at some of that. I really liked Nehemia looking back on his past like a book. Just one thing: Is the writing at the beginning anything to do with Lord of the Rings?


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(February 15th 2013 01:32 PM)Iogairn Wrote:  I felt goosebumps at some of that. I really liked Nehemia looking back on his past like a book. Just one thing: Is the writing at the beginning anything to do with Lord of the Rings?

Simple reference to Nordic tombs / barrows having puzzles and riddles to keep people out. Although I felt "Shit, King's return" when attempting to come up with a riddle, so I kinda added the "way is shut" part for obvious easter egg.


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I really enjoyed this, a great way to introduce the character but it sill leaves the big question of WHY. Anyway, I did notice a couple of mistakes, typos tense issues and such.
This post was last modified: February 25th 2013 02:36 AM by Nidali
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@Nidali Thanks for pointing out few of the typos. usually I'm just too busy to go and fix them. (Some are rather too obvious).

And actually, this isn't a character introduction. These are:
http://www.tesof.com/topic-nehemia-kinslayer
http://www.tesof.com/topic-beneath-the-s...is-thunder


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@Nehemia I still say this is a good introduction. I think its the best of the three anyway.
This post was last modified: February 25th 2013 02:48 AM by Nidali
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Sweet story, very cynical. I hope part two will be coming eventually and it builds on the "tenth eye" he acquired to maybe speak with those he murdered or something like that


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It will come eventually, but as my race choice has shifted to an Dunmer, his stories will be prioritized before Kinslayer.


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