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Alator Virane


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Name: Alator Virane.

Age:397 (he has learned how to manupulate Life in one of his adventures were he met a wizard living all by himself there he learned that restoration is the school that manipulates Life so then shouldnt you be able to actually manipulate Life? Its a difficult spell that makes the one who uses it extremely vulnerable to diseases and blood magic.)

Birthsign: the Lord

Occupation: Archmage, werewolf,sage and scholar.

Origin: The city Arcanea in the Mountains Close to Daggerfall

Apperance: A tall man with dark pretty long hair and a long beard that is tied togheter by leather at its tip. He has blue Eyes with a glimpse of humor.

Werewolf appearance: A large black werewolf with golden glowing Eyes.

Sigil: He is a noble of the wealthy, powerful and old Virane family. He uses the Virane familys sigil wich is a golden eagle on a blue field, or the Councils sigil.

Length : 6,5 feet.

Build. Normally muscular since he travels much.

Loves: magicand the Beauty of nature.

Hates: Necromancers.

Goal: He seeks to master the arcane arts and use them to fight evil and create Peace.

Weaknesses: If anyone has slaves he tries all that he has to free them wich means he can be tricked into ambushes that way.
And he is not good at defending him against Heavy weapons so if he is attacked by a skilled brute with a two handed weapon and magic resist he is going to have trouble getting away alive. And the curse gives him pains from time to time (one or two on a month) wich makes him less capable to defend himself. He has a abbility to get himself in trouble and are vurneable to blood magic and diseases. And Alator is a terrible marksman (he wouldnt be able to hit a wall if it was infront of him :p) and he arent even novice in sneak. He have trouble trusting people unless he has knowed them for a pretty long time. He can also get his head to full sometimes and forget other things. He often says what he Thinks even if it puts him in trouble.

skills/Strenghts: He is a great wizard (thanks to his Breton blood and family) and can cast spells that would make a regular mage drained of magicka pretty easy. He loves to solve riddles and mysteries (especially if it involves magic) and he can wield a blade so he isnt helpless in meele. He has a very Deep knowledge in all schools, except illusion, (master in destruction, mysticism and restoration) and lore. and are a very skilled enchanter.

Personality: Calm and prefers logic Before haste but can become furious when people are arrogant or when Close to daedra or necromancers or those that is having slaves. He holds wisdom and gladly shares it, he is also kind and forgiving.

Artifacts/special items: He has a Mighty staff made of oak, a sword wich has been named shadebane because of the evils it has slain and because it has been enchanted with powerful light magic.

religion: He worships the eight divines and Magnus.

Musical theme: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=o0uBYak27fI His musical theme I aimed for startes at around 2,07...

Best memory: When he was playing with his friend Amren in the Mountains when he was seven.

Worst memory: watching the College being sacked and his parents killed.

Story: I was born in the Mountains outside Daggerfall in the city Arcanea, and was the son of a great wizard Agrastyr Virane (an very old family gifted with powerful arcane) who was an master wizard in the council of arcanea an old Guild who has protected High Rock from necromancers and daedric influence for centuries. My father was a kind and wise man that used his great Powers to help the people and my mother was Jullienne Belamont a Wizard that my father had met in wayrest. She was kind and full of humility and had a Deep knowledge in restoration and alternation. I started study magic and other things when i was five in studied in our Guild-hall called the arcaean college(a proud building that was as large as the college of Winterhold, in the Mountains in High Rock west of Daggerfall were it was hidden for those who not belonged to the council) were I learned how to wield the arcane arts and wield a blade and write,read and other things that could prove useful later. My teachers and my parents saw that I had inherited a great Power and was afraid that I would use them for evil. My father always told me that "with great Powers, comes a great responsibility". I was skilled and intelligent and got the best grades in all the schools of magic, except illusion wich I always have had trouble with, lore, language, and in sword-practice, I had a special interesst in lore and I loved the lessons that contained lore. I became a good freind with a Breton named Dunard, he was a very skilled student on alchemy and Alternation. He was kind and shy but very smart.

Arcanea was a city built by White stone. The city wasnt so large itself, but it had one of the largest libraries in Tamriel. The city was surrounded by a high wall and in the centre it stands huge citadel with high Towers.

But one night when i was 16 i woke up and was hearing people screaming and explosions so i looked out and saw that the gates was breached and magic duels and fighting people was everywere on the courtyard and hundreds of undead rushed i through the gate. So I put on my robes took my staff and rushed out with my fellow mage friends and joined the fight.

There I faced and necromancers who were raising our and thei dead and hurled dark and blood magic at us. But after a few minutes i saw I saw my mother die by the hand of an horde of skeletons that ran thier swords through her and when i tried to locate i saw him in a duel with Three necromancers and i ran against them to help him but it was to late and he died in that duel. I bursted out in tears and sweared an oath that i would eliminate every single necromancer and attacked them full in fury. I killed those necromancers that horrible day luckily necromancers are better at raising undead than fight with magic, but when the Tower fell I knew we had to retreat so I gathered those who I could find (who was Three Guardians two wizards and two assasins) and ordered them to go to Daggerfall.

But Before they had taken a step the archmage stumbled out from the fighting wounded badly by an Arrow that had pierced his chest, I tried to heal it but he said "no my Child my time is out, take care of yourself and rebuild this council for you are the new archmage then he drew a Deep breath and became still". I was shocked, my father had told me that i was a brilliant student and had great Powers but i became a Little afraid because of the responsibility, i had Always thought that if i became archmage i would be much older but now i could just do the best I could. So we ran against a forest on the mountain but we didnt get far Before bolts of magic was hurled against us and all of us was struck down luckily i raised a ward that kept me from harm but my friends didn´t and died. Then i saw who had betrayed us, it was the master wizard of conjuration Athar so i shouted "WHY! EXPLAIN YOURSELF WORM!" and he answered with a voice Cold as ice and hard as snow. Isn´t that clear to you Archmage and laughed then he said: I seek Power because im tired of standing in someones shadow so I told the location of your Little college to the black worm cult, and look what happened and now you will die then the king will reward me.
Then attacked he and another wizard dressed black me so i kept beams of Lightning that hit their beams of frost we dueled for minutes than the wizard gave up and were flunged away by my thunderbolt. But then I wanted to prove to Athar the Power of the light and changed my magic into pure light (an restoration school spell that is very effective against undead) but the black sorcerers were left and after a couple of minutes I was starting to get tired and when I thougt I would lose and got afraid i was just a boy and he was a man with decades of experience but then Athar gave up a scream and got pierced by my light. i was so chocked that i didn´t react first but then i realised that he was an master of conjuration and not destruction so i thanked the gods for my luck and threw bolts of elemental magic against the others and then completely exhausted I stumbled away.


I settled down in Daggerfall were i grew in power and developed my skills there with the goal of master the arcane arts (especially the destruction and mysticism and restoration schools) and use them to bring Peace but i also recruited people for my Guild. I helped kingdom to deal with dark forces when they appeared because i find nothing more discusting than necromancy and slavery. And one Beautiful day ten years after the assault I Heard a rumor of Cirion a necromancer in Hammerfell that was gathering strenght for Molag Bal and himself by collecting souls. That was something i couldn´t ignore because I hated Molag Bal and his necromancer servants because they enslave people both in Life and in death. So I packed and left for Hammerfell. But Three Days later when i was Close to Cirions lair I Heard a growl so I turned around and against me in a speed I thought was astonishing a werewolf came and I just had raised my arm Before he had knocked me down and just when he was about to rip me apart I shouted and ran my sword through him but some of his blood came in my mouth and I felt a rage inside me like a beast was tearing me to pieces from inside, and I felt that I wanted to hunt.

I had become a werewolf and since i couldn´t Control my beast i joined the blood hunters (a large pack in the Alik´r) there i learned how to wield my Powers and not would transform if i didn´t want it (so I didn´t by accident kill someone if I got angry). But after four months I realised that I had to stop Cirion so I said Farewell to my friends there and continued to his lair (a small Cave in nothern Hammerfell) and challenged him on a duel. But he had become strong so we batteled for almost two hours and hurled beams and bolts of elemental magic at eachother but even when I unleashed the most powerfullest spells i had against him he didn´t tremble and we both got more tired for every spell we casted so at the end of the duel I was so full of fury that I drew my sword and jumped at him but he throwed a bolt of dark magic that pushed me away so I flew into the Caves wall so hard that i broke my left arm, then he laughed and said "you see I can´t be defeated by anyone of you pathetic human mages". Then I said I Think you have wrong then I unleashed my final Powers in an jolt of lightning that I hurled at him, he tried to protect himself with a ward but he was to late (but he wasnt to late to throw a curse on me that hit me in the side.) and with a scream was flunged away about twenty feet I didn´t see anything more because I collapsed by exhaustion.

I woke up later healed my arm and ate breakfast and released the souls he had captured and when i saw them leaving for atherius i knew i had found what i wanted to do in my Life and left for home (Daggerfall) knowing that i had freed many from an horrible slavery. I decided that i should strike against the dark forces (Molag Bal and his servants as i call them) whenever I can and I waiting for a time when I would be needed. I moved from Daggerfall when i was 81 with some freinds, and built a large castle in the Mountains were I now reside.
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Ok. wow ... i think?!, can't say i hate another necro/ vampire/ daedra hunter or a master of the arts/ arch mage/ werewolf ... but thats just it! he is just TOOO many things! it's a bit crazy don't you think?
I'll give you advice on ways i think you could improve in all stories you have made but my major tip will be to choose one theme and make that awesome, rather than picking many and spreading out the awesome (if you know what i mean :P)

firstly and this may only effect me :P but i see so many people choose the star sign that is there class so for example, he's a warrior so has the star sign of the warrior, he's a mage so has the mage star sign ... and so on, Be different! how about make a mage with the warrior star sign? i think that would be cool!

another thing that i see too many people do is make them selves the master of an art, in this case you are the master of destruction and mysticism! at the right young age of 16!? impressive! ... but i bit unbelievable don't you think? becoming a master of an art shpu;d be something your character achieves while you play as him, one of his future goals! remember it can take a life time to become a master of one art! don't make your character perfect.

vampire, necromancers and daedra! i would make it that you hunt or are hunted by only one of these baddies, unless you have a damn good reason! a vigilant of stendar maybe?

yeah. the next bit. wow. it just becomes so..... crazy! vampire necros summoning daedra, the first time we hear of your parents is at their deaths, then you retreated with 3 mages and 2 assassins!? before you could take a step the arch mage appears and just so happens decides now is the perfect time to make you the next arch mage for what seems to be no apparent reason and at the age of 16! your friend betrays you and :quote: with a voice Cold as ice and hard as snow he informs you that he seeks power. you then have a magical duel in which you make a beam of light BRIGHTER THAN THE SUN! ... wow. that was an interesting read but it is far too crazy! if you made it make more sense (which i bet you can) i bet it can be kick ass!

how i would suggest in doing that is; make the baddies necromancers, don't mention your parents if you are just going to kill them off in the paragraph you mention them in (if i was you i would mention them at all! there are too many 'vengences for my parents' stories out there!), i wouldn't make your character a master at any art nor would i make him 16. i would stick with the necromancer ambush and maybe mention that your character was in the running of being the next arch mage? so his story will be him becoming arch mage. maybe this made your friend jelous and that is the reason why he sold you out?. don't make your character over powered! and finally make us feel for your character! was he happy when he got chosen for arch mage? how did he feel by getting betrayed?

The next two paragraphs i would ignor, the werewolf thing just comes out of no where and if you make him kill your antagonist what purpose does your character have in the future? what is his goals? i would also remove the monologuing and 'final moves' it's far to Japanesey for my liking :P

now for general feed back,

add a 'challenges for my character' section, think of at least three challenges your character will face (physical, emotional and social) and keep weaknesses in mind, speaking of weaknesses ... add some weaknesses into your character! this is what people will like about your character! if your a game of thrones fan you will know this first hand! would tyrion lanister be as funny and likible if he was a tall good looking man? would arya be as awesome if she was a male and older? of course not! it's the weaknesses we love and its the weaknesses we relate to.

i hope i didn't sound too mean :c and i have to say this is probably the most interesting read i have had in a long time :P i do hope you take at least some of my feedback on board and reguardless i am looking forward into seeing this character grow and expand!
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(March 30th 2013, 03:44 AM)quib Wrote: Ok. wow ... i think?!, can't say i hate another necro/ vampire/ daedra hunter or a master of the arts/ arch mage/ werewolf ... but thats just it! he is just TOOO many things! it's a bit crazy don't you think?
I'll give you advice on ways i think you could improve in all stories you have made but my major tip will be to choose one theme and make that awesome, rather than picking many and spreading out the awesome (if you know what i mean :P)

firstly and this may only effect me :P but i see so many people choose the star sign that is there class so for example, he's a warrior so has the star sign of the warrior, he's a mage so has the mage star sign ... and so on, Be different! how about make a mage with the rrior star sign? i think that would be cool!

another thing that i see too many people do is make them selves the master of an art, in this case you are the master of destruction and mysticism! at the right young age of 16!? impressive! ... but i bit unbelievable don't you think? becoming a master of an art shpu;d be something your character achieves while you play as him, one of his future goals! remember it can take a life time to become a master of one art! don't make your character perfect.

vampire, necromancers and daedra! i would make it that you hunt or are hunted by only one of these baddies, unless you have a damn good reason! a vigilant of stendar maybe?

yeah. the next bit. wow. it just becomes so..... crazy! vampire necros summoning daedra, the first time we hear of your parents is at their deaths, then you retreated with 3 mages and 2 assassins!? before you could take a step the arch mage appears and just so happens decides now is the perfect time to make you the next arch mage for what seems to be no apparent reason and at the age of 16! your friend betrays you and :quote: with a voice Cold as ice and hard as snow he informs you that he seeks power. you then have a magical duel in which you make a beam of light BRIGHTER THAN THE SUN! ... wow. that was an interesting read but it is far too crazy! if you made it make more sense (which i bet you can) i bet it can be kick ass!

how i would suggest in doing that is; make the baddies necromancers, don't mention your parents if you are just going to kill them off in the paragraph you mention them in (if i was you i would mention them at all! there are too many 'vengences for my parents' stories out there!), i wouldn't make your character a master at any art nor would i make him 16. i would stick with the necromancer ambush and maybe mention that your character was in the running of being the next arch mage? so his story will be him becoming arch mage. maybe this made your friend jelous and that is the reason why he sold you out?. don't make your character over powered! and finally make us feel for your character! was he happy when he got chosen for arch mage? how did he feel by getting betrayed?

The next two paragraphs i would ignor, the werewolf thing just comes out of no where and if you make him kill your antagonist what purpose does your character have in the future? what is his goals? i would also remove the monologuing and 'final moves' it's far to Japanesey for my liking :P

now for general feed back,

add a 'challenges for my character' section, think of at least three challenges your character will face (physical, emotional and social) and keep weaknesses in mind, speaking of weaknesses ... add some weaknesses into your character! this is what people will like about your character! if your a game of thrones fan you will know this first hand! would tyrion lanister be as funny and likible if he was a tall good looking man? would arya be as awesome if she was a male and older? of course not! it's the weaknesses we love and its the weaknesses we relate to.

i hope i didn't sound too mean :c and i have to say this is probably the most interesting read i have had in a long time :P i do hope you take at least some of my feedback on board and reguardless i am looking forward into seeing this character grow and expand!

Oh i wrote wrong he mastered those schools later i must have mixed them up. And i know thats an unrealistic story but i just tried to make an such interesting story i could but i´ll fix that but he has to be a werewolf since im a part of the blood hunters Guild. thanks for the feedback :D
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ok, he's getting better ^-^. i like that you have done his bio in first person aswel :). i wouldn't have the necromancers summon daedra because i believe its something conjurers would do not necromancers. i wouldn't mention your parents :c have someone else to avenge if you want an avenge story!
oh heres an idea! how about the necromancers raise your dead friends! that would be something that your character would remember!
i think you should mention your character is one of the chosen to be the next arch mage and show more of arthur, show us why he betrays you. lastly, and you may not like this :c i wouldn't make him a werewolf. i feel it comes out of no where and instead of adding depth ir removes it :c.

i glad it seem you have been taking some of my feedback on board :) you have added weaknesses, but i don't see what you have put to be that dire of a weakness. think more of a physical weakness. seeing though he is a magic user is he weak in close combat? does he suffer from a disease? something like that :)

i'm liking where this character is going :) remember at the end of the day this is YOUR character and if you disagree with any pointers i have made please tell me :) i always review a character as if it was mine, so i say how I would improve it :) but yeah i would like to see an epic character from every one on this site!
looking forward into seeing this character expand :)
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(March 30th 2013, 01:59 PM)quib Wrote: ok, he's getting better ^-^. i like that you have done his bio in first person aswel :). i wouldn't have the necromancers summon daedra because i believe its something conjurers would do not necromancers. i wouldn't mention your parents :c have someone else to avenge if you want an avenge story!
oh heres an idea! how about the necromancers raise your dead friends! that would be something that your character would remember!
i think you should mention your character is one of the chosen to be the next arch mage and show more of arthur, show us why he betrays you. lastly, and you may not like this :c i wouldn't make him a werewolf. i feel it comes out of no where and instead of adding depth ir removes it :c.

i glad it seem you have been taking some of my feedback on board :) you have added weaknesses, but i don't see what you have put to be that dire of a weakness. think more of a physical weakness. seeing though he is a magic user is he weak in close combat? does he suffer from a disease? something like that :)

i'm liking where this character is going :) remember at the end of the day this is YOUR character and if you disagree with any pointers i have made please tell me :) i always review a character as if it was mine, so i say how I would improve it :) but yeah i would like to see an epic character from every one on this site!
looking forward into seeing this character expand :)

I know that the werewolf thing is getting out of nowere but im a member of the blood hunters so i have to be one. And i have some new ideas for example that im going to add Another weakness and some strengths and im going to write more of his parents.


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I Think he should be a master on mysticism, destruction and restoration the rest schools will be his goal to master.

(March 30th 2013, 01:59 PM)quib Wrote: ok, he's getting better ^-^. i like that you have done his bio in first person aswel :). i wouldn't have the necromancers summon daedra because i believe its something conjurers would do not necromancers. i wouldn't mention your parents :c have someone else to avenge if you want an avenge story!
oh heres an idea! how about the necromancers raise your dead friends! that would be something that your character would remember!
i think you should mention your character is one of the chosen to be the next arch mage and show more of arthur, show us why he betrays you. lastly, and you may not like this :c i wouldn't make him a werewolf. i feel it comes out of no where and instead of adding depth ir removes it :c.

i glad it seem you have been taking some of my feedback on board :) you have added weaknesses, but i don't see what you have put to be that dire of a weakness. think more of a physical weakness. seeing though he is a magic user is he weak in close combat? does he suffer from a disease? something like that :)

i'm liking where this character is going :) remember at the end of the day this is YOUR character and if you disagree with any pointers i have made please tell me :) i always review a character as if it was mine, so i say how I would improve it :) but yeah i would like to see an epic character from every one on this site!
looking forward into seeing this character expand :)

I have added that Cirion threw a curse on him that couldn´t be healed that makes him get paralysed by pain one or two times on a month.
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Quib is a great person with all this. I think we take our characters from past games and though they were all awesome in their own way we have to realize there is not just one Nevarine, Dragon Born, etc. There are many heroes and we all need to remember that we can all be vulnerable. Great story.


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(April 5th 2013, 06:34 AM)Archmage Alator Wrote: I Think he should be a master on mysticism, destruction and restoration the rest schools will be his goal to master.

(March 30th 2013, 01:59 PM)quib Wrote: ok, he's getting better ^-^. i like that you have done his bio in first person aswel :). i wouldn't have the necromancers summon daedra because i believe its something conjurers would do not necromancers. i wouldn't mention your parents :c have someone else to avenge if you want an avenge story!
oh heres an idea! how about the necromancers raise your dead friends! that would be something that your character would remember!
i think you should mention your character is one of the chosen to be the next arch mage and show more of arthur, show us why he betrays you. lastly, and you may not like this :c i wouldn't make him a werewolf. i feel it comes out of no where and instead of adding depth ir removes it :c.

i glad it seem you have been taking some of my feedback on board :) you have added weaknesses, but i don't see what you have put to be that dire of a weakness. think more of a physical weakness. seeing though he is a magic user is he weak in close combat? does he suffer from a disease? something like that :)

i'm liking where this character is going :) remember at the end of the day this is YOUR character and if you disagree with any pointers i have made please tell me :) i always review a character as if it was mine, so i say how I would improve it :) but yeah i would like to see an epic character from every one on this site!
looking forward into seeing this character expand :)

I have added that Cirion threw a curse on him that couldn´t be healed that makes him get paralysed by pain one or two times on a month.

So not to be crude but i am going to be. After reading that I thought 'so he menstrates...'


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(April 5th 2013, 06:34 AM)Archmage Alator Wrote: I have added that Cirion threw a curse on him that couldn´t be healed that makes him get paralysed by pain one or two times on a month.

Ok that is a nasty ... yet oddly specific weakness :P, the reason i would sway away from weaknesses like these, it isn't your characters weakness! now what i mean by that is, this isn't a weakness natural to your character, its one someone else has inflicted onto him. weaknesses don't have to be strong or weak! i think thats the misconseption a lot of people are getting. hell, i use to think like that. reality is weaknesses come is all shapes and sizes. anything can be a weakness IF you make it one.
An example: Jacob is very nice (seems like a strength). Jacob is too nice for his own good! (now with a minor change, Jacob's niceness has became strength to weakness!)


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I figured I would give you some feedback based on my experiences in an RP with Alator. I will start out by saying this is feedback, just what I think based of my experiences, so please do not take it personally.

My first impressions of Alator is that he is just way to powerful. He is an archmage. They are incredibly powerful, however you wont be able to play as an archmage in the game. Most people are RP'ing as the character they would like to be once the game is released. I mean a normal character just wouldn't be able to cast a spell to knock an entire army of soldiers backwards 30 yards. Not to mention he is also a werewolf. That part is strange indeed, but that's not my prerogative. I have no problems with werewolf players, but just remember that right now your character is set up for a lot of god-moding. That can be a big turn off for the people you are in RP with.

One issue I have is that a lot of your physical descriptions don't make very much sense to me. He is a breton, so very much like a human as far as height/age. Alator has been able to somehow manipulate magic to increase his age, I'm ok with that (maybe add some info as to how). However that should affect him physically. He is living almost 3 times past the average life expectancy for a breton, he shouldn't be described as 7 feet tall and pretty muscular. That to me sounds like a frail old man, desperately clinging to his magic that is keeping him alive. Not someone you would expect to cause any trouble in a melee anyways. He just needs some weaknesses, he is way too much of an all-powerful hero character right now.


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(April 24th 2013, 06:23 PM)Grape Drank Wrote: I figured I would give you some feedback based on my experiences in an RP with Alator. I will start out by saying this is feedback, just what I think based of my experiences, so please do not take it personally.

My first impressions of Alator is that he is just way to powerful. He is an archmage. They are incredibly powerful, however you wont be able to play as an archmage in the game. Most people are RP'ing as the character they would like to be once the game is released. I mean a normal character just wouldn't be able to cast a spell to knock an entire army of soldiers backwards 30 yards. Not to mention he is also a werewolf. That part is strange indeed, but that's not my prerogative. I have no problems with werewolf players, but just remember that right now your character is set up for a lot of god-moding. That can be a big turn off for the people you are in RP with.

One issue I have is that a lot of your physical descriptions don't make very much sense to me. He is a breton, so very much like a human as far as height/age. Alator has been able to somehow manipulate magic to increase his age, I'm ok with that (maybe add some info as to how). However that should affect him physically. He is living almost 3 times past the average life expectancy for a breton, he shouldn't be described as 7 feet tall and pretty muscular. That to me sounds like a frail old man, desperately clinging to his magic that is keeping him alive. Not someone you would expect to cause any trouble in a melee anyways. He just needs some weaknesses, he is way too much of an all-powerful hero character right now.

Thanks for the feedback (Im not so good with feets but 7 is to tall i Think.) I`ll buff him down :p. And i know he is Little to God-mode like. To be honest i made him very like as i made my Skyrim char, this was my first bio so im happy to hear your feedback. About the age i saw that Kaaos was 400 years and Harlwystyr was 900+ so i did as them. About the archmage thing he is just a Guild leader and the Guild leaders rank is archmge. I did some kind of mixture between my skyrim char and Gandalf :p. I´ll fix it and ones again thanks for the feedback. And i dont Think he would do so well in RPs if he was an old man :p and i have added some more weaknesses.
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(April 24th 2013, 05:48 PM)Solduiran Long-Finger Wrote:
(April 5th 2013, 06:34 AM)Archmage Alator Wrote: I Think he should be a master on mysticism, destruction and restoration the rest schools will be his goal to master.

(March 30th 2013, 01:59 PM)quib Wrote: ok, he's getting better ^-^. i like that you have done his bio in first person aswel :). i wouldn't have the necromancers summon daedra because i believe its something conjurers would do not necromancers. i wouldn't mention your parents :c have someone else to avenge if you want an avenge story!
oh heres an idea! how about the necromancers raise your dead friends! that would be something that your character would remember!
i think you should mention your character is one of the chosen to be the next arch mage and show more of arthur, show us why he betrays you. lastly, and you may not like this :c i wouldn't make him a werewolf. i feel it comes out of no where and instead of adding depth ir removes it :c.

i glad it seem you have been taking some of my feedback on board :) you have added weaknesses, but i don't see what you have put to be that dire of a weakness. think more of a physical weakness. seeing though he is a magic user is he weak in close combat? does he suffer from a disease? something like that :)

i'm liking where this character is going :) remember at the end of the day this is YOUR character and if you disagree with any pointers i have made please tell me :) i always review a character as if it was mine, so i say how I would improve it :) but yeah i would like to see an epic character from every one on this site!
looking forward into seeing this character expand :)

I have added that Cirion threw a curse on him that couldn´t be healed that makes him get paralysed by pain one or two times on a month.

So not to be crude but i am going to be. After reading that I thought 'so he menstrates...'

What do you mean with menstrates (im Swedish and i didnt understand the Word :s)
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