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Axel Ismark


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Firstname - Axel

Surname - Ismark

Sex - Male

Age - 20

Occupation - Adventurer

Faction - Ebonheart Pact

Appearance - 5ft 10in, Dark brown (almost black) hair cut short, blue eyes, clean shaven, athletic build, wears ebony armour, wields 2 long swords, scars spread over his body.

Personality - Trustworthy, relaxed, loyal, courageous, protective, confident, focused, reserved, stubborn, driven, dedicated, helpful, impatient at times, can also be impulsive, hot-headed and emotionally detached

Social Background/Backstory - Axel lived with his mother and father in a small town. Both his mother and father were farmers and ,like most Nords, were racist. Axel's parent's racism was caused by there own ignorance. Throughout their lives they never decided to take the time to learn about the other races that lived in Tamriel. They became afraid of what they did not understand and they were too afraid to confront this problem. So instead of blaming their own ignorance they took their anger out on what they believed to be the problem, the other races. Axel's parents were also firm believers and worshipers of the Gods and through Axel's childhood he started to develop the same ideas and beliefs as them. Aside from Axel's parents being racist, they were very kind, helpful people. They always told Axel to help those in need, even if he didn't have a lot to offer them, it's better than nothing. They also taught him to be his own man and to not let others harsh words discourage him from following his own path. His parents supported him through everything he did and they always told Axel that he would accomplish great things one day. In the village Axel and his parents lived in there were not a lot of children. All the children knew eachother but Axel only had one friend, a girl named Veronica. Axel and Veronica would often hangout by the river near their village. Veronica had long blonde hair and bright green eyes. She was always able to tell when Axel was feeling a bit down and she always knew exactly what to say to cheer him up. She had a smile that could brighten any cloudy day. Veronica was a year younger than Axel but this never bothered him. She was the only true friend Axel ever had in the village. Axel's family and Veronica's family often went on picnics together. When Axel was 12 years old his family and Veronica's family went on one of their usual picnics. There had been rumors going around the village about bandits lurking around but Axel's parents disregarded these as just rumors. Axel's family and Veronica's family set up at their usual picnic spot and after a few minutes they were attacked by a group of bandits. Axel noticed that not only were the members of the bandit group all mixed races but that the leader of the group was a Nord. They all wore mismatched armor but they all similarly had a symbol engraved into their armor. The symbol looked like a circle with six lines sprouting from the center towards the edges of the circle. Axel watched in horror as his parents, his dear friend Veronica and her family were slaughtered. Axel only survived because an Argonian Adventurer was passing by and noticed what was going on. The Argonian managed to kill a few bandits, saving Axel and scaring the other bandits off. Upon seeing this act of kindness from a total stranger and on top of that an Argonian, Axel realized that the beliefs his parents shared with him were based off of their own ignorance. Axel decided that he would not end up like his parents, misguided by their own inexperience and frightened by their lack of knowledge. The Argonian offered Axel to travel with him. Axel accepted and for the next 3 years he trained and traveled with the Argonian. The Argonian told Axel his name is Veekus. Once Axel turned 15 he left the Argonian but brought with him his new sword abilities and his new outlook on the world. Axel decided he would try and disregarded all the racist beliefs his parents had taught him, and instead go by what the Argonian had taught him,

"We are all living beings, sure we may look different, smell different, have different tastes in things, but we all exist on this land together. Everyone has their own story to tell, their own fears, hopes, and dreams. By learning about others we better understand ourselves and we realize we all aren't that different after all".

Axel vowed to himself that he would find and kill the bandits that killed his parents and Veronica and her parents, whatever the cost. Axel has spent the last 5 years of his life by himself, wandering and training, looking for the bandits that killed his family and his best friend.

Best Memory - The days he spent with Veronica by the river

Worst Memory - Watching the murder of his parents and his friend Veronica

Skills - Expert swordsman, he personally likes battling with 2 swords rather than one, skilled in hand-to-hand combat, knows how to use a bow but mainly for hunting, he is very used to the heavy armor he wears it just feels like an extra layer of skin, is pretty agile and has great stamina/endurance. He has always been fascinated by magic and spells even though he cannot use them himself.

Challenges for the Character - After the killing of his family and friend he became depressed up until the age of 17. He has gotten over it for the most part but still occasionally has moments of depression and loneliness. The memory of that day also causes him to have frequent nightmares which causes him to lack sleep most nights. He is sometimes reluctant to help those in need because he questions if it will aid him in his quest to find his parents killers. The thought of this quest can also completely consume him causing him to question most decisions he makes. Axel can also be over confident in his own abilities. He believes there are no limits on his physical abilities which can cause him to overexert himself often. His confidence can also cause him to underestimate his opponents. He also finds trouble in making new friends and allies. Since he has be alone for 5 years of his life he sometimes fails to see the opportunity in creating valuable friends and allies.

Birthsign - The Lord

Religious Views - After seeing what happened to his parents and seeing how much his parents worshiped the Gods, Axel sees no reason in worshiping something that does not care for you or your loved ones. He does not understand how a being his parents loved so much could just turn a blind eye on them in their time of need.

   
This post was last modified: March 23rd 2013, 10:47 PM by TheNewGuy
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ok. i like where this is going but i have a few pointers

nords being racist: stereotypes are fun and easy to use but remove most if not all depth! if you do want to keep your characters parents racist give me a reason why. also your character just loosing that view point that he has been given since birth is strange i find. sure an argonian saved him but would this change a view point hardwired since axel was born.

suggestion: give a reasonable reason for your parents being racist (just saying they are because they are nord make them unlikeable which damages one major part of your back story which i'll go to later). so maybe your father has been in wars against the dunmer? or they have been attacked by a group of other reasons. another thing i would personally do for a added twist is make the group of bandits a group of mixed races and have the leader as a nord. this would impact on your character trying to become more open to the other races.

your parents death: because all that you have stated about your parents is racism most people will see them as being rather nasty. you'll have to either give a good reason for their racism or talk about their good points! make us care for your character for loosing his parents! make us want your character to get revenge

ok now for some good points ^-^. there is potential for a pretty cool complex story but it is on a thin line and it can become real dull real fast and we don't want that! i like the fact that another race has rescued you. this could make your characters question his believes. i can see him joining the pact to be difficult due to joining other races. i would re frame from saying he has Mastered a skill i think mastering a skill will be something for your character to achieve on his adventures and your character is only 20 after all! also i find it strange for him not to have a religion, if you have a reason for this write it done! maybe he has cursed the gods for doing nothing at the death of his family?

lastly i would think of some weaknesses. he's young so is he over confident? maybe he's not as strong as the other nords?

i do like the hints of what this character can become and i hope you don't find this post too hard but i would like to see this character develop :)
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Thanks for the feedback and pointers! This is the first time I've done something like this so I sorta just winged it lol. I'll definitely take what you said into consideration and try to add more depth and details.
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fantatic :) i hope to see this character develop and no problem we all start from some where i think i'm on my 4th draft for my bio you just have to keep working on it mate :)
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Just updated, lemme know what you think
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Very good man I read the original and your revision definitely helps flesh everything out and make everyone more relatable. =)


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much much better! you have thought alot about what your character will be going through next in his adventure. my favorite part is what you have added to his personality 'impulsive at times' this can be both a strength and a weakness (my favourite feature of any character).

you have shown that your character has been shaped by both his parents and the tragedy that struck him. I love that he has became hellbent on getting revenge. but has he asked himself 'what will i do after i avenge my friend and family'? or is he too blood crazed to think that far ahead?

glad you have updated it ^-^ and remember if you think of any more cool ways to expand on the character just write it down. Like his story after he got saved by the argonian, did he stay with him? did the argonian train him? really enjoyed reading that and looking forward to seeing this character grow.

on another related note i have a thread called character scenarios : http://www.tesof.com/topic-character-scenarios i have made it to help people trying to add depth to their characters. basically it is 15 what if questions. you answer then how you think your character would approach the scenario. hope it helps :)

i really like how this character actually contrast mine (quib) and yet they are both pretty similar. they are both adventurers and they both had a tragedy happen to them. quib hates nords due to the tragedy while your character has became more open and my character has shut himself away due to the tragedy while yours has decided to do something about it.
This post was last modified: March 17th 2013, 12:33 AM by quib
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Thank you both for the feedback :)! I'll keep adding to it as more things pop into my head. I'll also try and make time today to do the character senarios, it seems pretty fun. :)
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