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Character Bio - Syravus Kane


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Name
Syravus Kane

Title
The Divine Arbiter

Sex
Male

Race
Imperial

Age
38

Occupation
Criminal turned Priest turned "Hunter"


Faction
Ebonheart Pact

Appearance
Standing at 6'3, Kane is fairly large for the average Imperial. He wields a mighty claymore known to him as the Ethereal Blade and wears armor created by a legendary blacksmith. His thick black hair flows down the back of his neck, and his trimmed black beard sits over his strong, chiseled jaw giving him a rougher look. His well built physique gives him a look similar to that of a Nordic warrior and his friendly, yet piercing gaze can shake even the toughest of adversaries. He is hardly seen smiling and is most often seen with a disgruntled look on his face.

Personality
Although always looking angry, Kane is a friendly man who always tries to see the best in everyone. But being friendly does not mean he is trusting in others. In fact, some say killing a Daedroth with your bare hands is easier than winning the trust of Kane. Being a man of the gods, he tends to look upon those who dabble in the arts of the daedra with disgust. He tends to drink ale and chat with his entrusted circle, from topics ranging from inflated rumors to their most recent conquests.

Backstory
Syravus Kane is born into a poor family of Bruma, several years before the Dark Anchors. He and his twin brother, Ailliad, grow inseparable over the years, that is until they grow up and go on their separate paths, Ailliad as a priest and Kane as a thief. Kane travels to Leyawiin, where he meets a strange Argonian named Walks-With-Shadows. The Argonian tells Kane of a shipment of precious gems and gold being loaded onto a ship called The Golden Thistle. When night falls, Kane is caught trying to steal from the ship, and is sent to the Imperial City in which he spends 12 years in prison. On a dark night, Kane wakes to the guards rushing about and yelling. He then hears a loud horn outside the cell window. He looks out the window and sees a large structure above. Confused and frightened he rushed to the cell door and starts yelling at the guards to release him, but they just run by. The next thing he hears is a loud crash behind him. One of the anchors smashed open the wall to his cell. He peers out to the right and sees a large battle taking place. He looks left and nothing. He makes his escape. After a few long weeks he arrives back at his old home and finds his brother, Ailliad. Ailliad tells Kane of their parents' peaceful deaths and takes Kane under his wing. Two years go by and Kane is a devout priest along with his brother. One day, another priest, brother Tyrabus, informs Kane that Ailliad was killed at the hands of a wandering Daedroth, nicknamed Banetooth. Kane sits down shocked and angry. He doesn't move for three days. And that's when it hits him. He understands his destiny. He makes it his task to hunt and destroy all daedra. When looking for his weapon, he notices a chest left to him by his father. He remembers his father saying "When you find out your true destiny, then must you open this chest and take what has been, and will always be, yours". He opens it. Inside is a set of golden armor, with runic symbols throughout the edges. The runes glow a bright blue. He places the armor on and then notices the sword that lies at the bottom. It's also golden with glowing runes. But when he picked up the sword, blue flames appeared on the blade. Both the blade and armor were said to be created by the same blacksmith who served Reman Cyrodiil in the First Era. Wielding the mighty sword he would come to call The Ethereal Blade, The Divine Arbiter was born. Knowing his task would be tough, he decided to create a band of daedra hunters known as The Order of Retribution. Many came to become members of the order, but only those with pure hearts and strong arms would become a Champion of Retribution. Kane left with seven men to fight the darkness of the daedra. They slayed Banetooth and many more beasts. Nowadays, Kane can be seen riding around Tamriel with his Champions, hunting the very creatures that killed his brother years ago.

Best Memory
Seeing his brother Ailliad after spending 12 years in prison.
Worst Memory
Being told of his brother's untimely death.

Skills
-An early life of crime allows him to be a smooth talker (when he decides to talk that is)
-Two years of priesthood has made him strong with heals and light magic
-His large size and strength allow him to be fairly agile in heavy armor
-His many years of fighting the daedra has increased his skill with claymores
-Leading The Order of Retribution has honed his leadership and tactical skills drastically


Personal Challenges
Trusting others

Birthsign
The Warrior

Religious Views
Very religious. Looks to the gods in times of need.

Political Views
Doesn't care much for politics, even in these times.
This post was last modified: December 8th 2015, 02:55 AM by Nomad6473
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Upvoting this for being the first post in a while.

Anyways, I'd like to highlight two things that, in my humble opinion, could have been done better. Alas, I am no editor and the Divines know my works are riddled with errors, but...
1) You have a tendency of using too simple sentences. Some people probably could and would argue with me on this, but the sentences felt a little lackluster.... perhaps you could try building more elaborate sentences, and embellishing them with a few epithets? Combining sentences into longer ones and using direct speech?
2)Always a major "mistake" in my stories: the character is too uber. And cliche-ish. If you can pull this of nicely, alright.


"Cold be hand and heart and bone
and cold be sleep under stone
never more to wake on stony bed
never, till the Sun fails and the Moon is dead
In the black wind the stars shall die
and still be gold here let them lie
till the Dark Lord lifts his hand
over dead sea and withered land."
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(December 8th 2015, 10:14 AM)Warlockelder Wrote: Upvoting this for being the first post in a while.

Anyways, I'd like to highlight two things that, in my humble opinion, could have been done better. Alas, I am no editor and the Divines know my works are riddled with errors, but...
1) You have a tendency of using too simple sentences. Some people probably could and would argue with me on this, but the sentences felt a little lackluster.... perhaps you could try building more elaborate sentences, and embellishing them with a few epithets? Combining sentences into longer ones and using direct speech?
2)Always a major "mistake" in my stories: the character is too uber. And cliche-ish. If you can pull this of nicely, alright.
Thanks for your input. It's my first time ever posting a roleplaying story, and I just figured I'd give it a shot. I did a decent amount of research on some of the lore, like Reman Cyrodiil, to make my bio a little more plausible. But I will certainly look into the issues you stated and work to make my bio, and future works, better.
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