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Clusan, the Redguard in search of "Blade Singers"


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Firstname - Clusan

Surname - It is unusual for Redguards to have a surname unless they are married in nobility, needing a surname to be recognized by. Commoners generally do not have a surname. Clusan does not mind not having a surname. A first name is a name. As long as their is a name, even if it is just a first name, it is enough to recognize someone by.

Title - Clusan 'the Hopeless'

Sex - Male

Age - 27

Occupation - Blacksmith. Mercenary. Scribe.

Faction - Daggerfall Covenant

Appearance - Clusan stands at 5'11. He is completely hairless, shaving his arms, legs, eyebrows, etc. His eyes are a dark blue color. He is fairly muscular. He has an assortment of tattoos covering his body. He skin is fairly darker than normal.

Personality - Clusan is very optimistic. He faces the world with a determined way, passing by challenges he comes to with either skill or brain. He is somewhat friendly, being more reclusive around non-Redguards. He is smarter than most people would think he is and often uses those smarts. He can be pushy and scary when he needs to. Dexterous. Honorable, which can be his undoing if his opponent is a coward. Clusan is a duelist, known for using speed, skill, and tactics over brute force like nords and orcs.

Social Background/Backstory - Clusan was born in Sentinel. He was raised by Silan and Lairah. Both of his parents were "Crowns" or people who believe strongly in the Yokudan traditions which they once followed back when they lived in Yokuda, but those traditions still live on in Tamriel. Clusan, in the middle class, was raised learning about Yokuda and its history. He learned all about Yokuda and its happening and peoples. Among the learning were tales of "Blade Singers" who were the best swordsmen known to Yokuda, maybe even the world. Clusan took interest in the "Blade Singers" more than anything else and spent some of his spare time doing extra research on them. When Clusan was 12, he told Silan about his dream. Clusan wanted to become an "Ansei" better known as the best "Blade Singers." Silan respected Clusan's dream. After that day, Silan enrolled Clusan in training classes to teach Clusan discipline and fighting skill. Years passed and now Clusan was the age of 18. He was a bit above average in fighting, and honoring "Ansei" tradition, used swords, mainly dual-wielding. Clusan, peculiarly, had taken to the custom of shaving off all of his hair. He believed it was suitable for he was a duelist, a person who needed speed and maneuverability and it also would prevent enemies from grabbing Clusan and getting traction on his skin. Clusan also covered himself in tattoos. Most resembled Yokudan gods but some, like the tattoos on his cheeks and forhead, a ring in each location, were for his own purposes. Clusan learned the entirety of Yokuda history and the Yokudan language "Yoku." Throughout his life, Clusan had never left Sentinel. He was now prepared though. He would decide to leave with the teachings he has learned in combat, knowledge, and religion. Clusan was given two swords and light steel armor, which his father paid for. Clusan then signed up to protect a trade caravan that was headed for Taneth. Clusan did this for money, but mainly to try to get somewhere else so he can venture out into the sands of Hammerfel to try to find some obscure text or two about the "Blade Singers." The travel to Taneth was easy going. Clusan made some friends with the other mercenaries on the trip, and asked them if they would go venture the sands with him looking for loot. Only one agreed. This man was Domas. Clusan and Domas shared countless ventures and created a medium sized exploration group. Only one expeditions they took was ever useful to Clusan’s dreams, where he found obscure texts about “Blade Singers,” but that is another story altogether. After finding the texts, Clusan returned to Sentinel to practice smithing so that if the chance ever arose he could craft a “Shehai.” Clusan spent three more years of his life in Setinel, learning forging skills and becoming quite good at it along with now being 27. Domas had not found any more texts, but Clusan could still dream and hope that one day more would be found so that he can follow through with his dreams of becoming an "Ansei." Now we are brought to the present day. Clusan still resides in Sentinel, keeping up on fighting techniques, forging skills, and literate skills as he waits, in hope, for Domas and his men to find more texts. Clusan no longer has the title 'Clusan the Hopeless'. He showed the texts to everyone in Sentinel, discrediting them for insulting him about his dream being foolish. The texts are now locked away in a safe in Clusan's home in Sentinel. And now, his story starts.


Best Memory - Finding the texts that gave him obscure info on the "Shehai."

Worst Memory - Earning the title 'Clusan the Hopeless' and being seen as a fool for searching for the texts of the "Blade Singers" by most of those he encountered.

Skills - Expert combat with dual-wield weapons or one-handed. Forging one-handed weapons and light armors. Acrobatics and athletics; being able to climb, run, swim, etc. Speaking "Yoku," the language of the Redguards before they came to Tamriel, along with normal languages. Historical knowledge on the Redguards, dating back to the earliest knowledge of when they still lived on Yokuda.

Challenges for the Character - To find the true knowledge and scripts of the "Sword Singers" so he can create a "Shehai", a "Sword Singer's" ultimate weapon, crafted from part of their spirit and the strongest metals to their disposal, and become an "Ansei" and be one of the last, if not the last alive. This will probably be the most challenging thing an individual can do. The "Blade Singers" are known to be gone from existance, but a few probably still reside somewhere. Very few texts and documents would survive the ages up to the time when Clusan lives because they were brought hundreds of years ago when Yokuda sank, meaning that it will be extremely rare and extremely hard to find such texts. Some of Clusan's weaknesses are his honor and thirst for Yokudan texts. An enemy or someone who doesn't like Clusan, if they are a coward, could take advantage of Clusan's honor and hospitality. Clusan also has a weakness for doing ridiculous things to get Yokudan texts. He has been known to pay very large sums for things such as a small paragraph of old Yoku text; therefore, someone could take advantage of him through this thirst of information.

Birthsign - The Thief.

Religious Views - The old Yokudan gods.

Politics Views - He sees politics as a waste of time. His only goal is to find knowledge left by the "Sword Singers" to become a true "Ansei" and politics gets in the way, distracting him and using up his limited time.

I Hope you all enjoy this grand wall of text. If there is anything you'd like me to answer or add, just say so.
This post was last modified: August 11th 2013, 09:19 AM by Iamme123


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Hail Iamme123, creator of Clusan, i hope you enjoy your stay in the RP forums.
It's nice to see a redguard in these forums :). there so many things you have done right with your character so a very well done in that respect :).

Name:- nothing wrong there :)

Surname:- ok, for this you have just giving me infomation but tell me how Clusan feels about this? does he follow tradition so doesn't care! or maybe he hates the fact that commoners don't generally have surnames that he has given himself a fake one!

Occupation:- we have many Mercs on these forums but that doesn't mean by any means you shouldn't make one :), a blacksmith seems cool

Sex, Age, Faction:- yep, yep, yep

Appearance:- Pretty good, maybe give us a reason why he is completely hairless or the reason for the tattoos

Personality:- so he's strong, smart AND Dexterous! what isn't he? what faults does he have in his personality?

Bio:- ok your Bio, first thing i have to say about it, it huge! you have fallen into the same trap that many have done before you! you have made your bio too much like a story you would see in the library. remember, less is more! you'll be able to shorten this bio down and it still tell the reader the story you want.
I do really like your bio, i like the story it tells but he seems to succeed at every thing that comes his way! :c,

Best memory, worst memory:- nothing wrong there

Challenges for the Character:- ok, you have said the task that is at hand but how is it going to be a challenge?? what are your characters weaknesses?

Birthsign, Religious views and politics:- standard :)

good first draft, i look forward in seeing your character improve and grow ^-^


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I fixed the things you pointed out the best I could. If there is still anything that needs to be fixed, just say and I will do my best to fix it. And yes, the backstory is till fairly long, but that is the smallest I can make it while going in-depth.
This post was last modified: April 14th 2013, 12:02 PM by Iamme123


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(April 14th 2013, 12:02 PM)Iamme123 Wrote: I fixed the things you pointed out the best I could. If there is still anything that needs to be fixed, just say and I will do my best to fix it. And yes, the backstory is till fairly long, but that is the smallest I can make it while going in-depth.

much better ^-^, recklessness is one of my favourite weaknesses if done right! just remember the feedback i give is only my opinion! by no means do you have to do exactly what i say :) if i ever say anything that you disagree with! discuss it with me, i'm here to help improve YOUR character, nothing more, nothing less :)

your bio is a awesome length now and yes you are exactly right, we don't want to remove any depth of your character who of which is a really interesting character i have to say! keep it up and keep updating him whenever you see fit ^-^


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Alrighty, good to know. I've only gotten into one RP, which is the open warfare one. I would get into more but they've all progressed beyond the point where I can join them.


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yeah, that does happen :P, you'll find new RP's pop up now and again. you can always ask for someone to sum up whats going on and how you could join, (make sure it isn't a closed RP)


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