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Faction & Race:
Ebonheart Pact (Argonian)
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okie dokie! i love Vaermina i think she/he is a pretty cool daedric prince and i do like aspects of your character, there is one bit i LOVE but you haven't expanded on it. (i'll mention that in a bit)
firstly i wouldn't roleplay someone who is a champion of a daedric prince, there will be thousands and it can pretty quickly remove most if not all depth from your character if you make him this 'chosen one' type of person. try making him a priest of the prince maybe? the part that i liked was your character making his wife a priestess but you didn't expand on this! keep in mind your character is trying to convince his wife to become a zealot for a creature that no one can truely know, most see evil and best of all it causes nightmares. make that a important part to your story! expand on it! was it hard? was she already open to daedra worship?
i would also be careful with some of the other facts you've added ''After his masters death Erandur rose to the rank of a professor at the university the youngest to ever do so. He became a very popular professor due to his high use of demonstrations and his common bending of the rules to get his point across.''. does he have to become professor? and if so does he have to be the youngest ever to do so? does he have to be very popular? basically does he have to be so damn perfect!? :P, in my opinion perfection = meh, there is nothing exciting about perfection! ad some faults in there, he is a daedra worshipper after all
and finally the thing i mention in all bios, where is your challenges for the character section? this is the most important part in many respects. what challenges is your character going to face? how is he going to struggle to achieve these goals?
i look forward to seeing your character expand in the future :)
This post was last modified: March 27th 2013, 12:26 PM by quib
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