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Justiciar Simo Häyhä


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Firstname - Simo

Surname - Häyhä

Race - Bosmer

Title - Justiciar

Sex - Male

Age - 28

Occupation - Huntsman

Faction - Aldermi Dominion

Appearance - Athletic Body build,Dark copper skin,Mahogany hair,Hazel eyes, Jagged scar under left eye

Personality - Distant, Calm, Methodical, Quick to action, Shell of former self, Twisted sense of justice.

Social Background/Backstory - Once a hunter for a small village near the border of Cyrodiil, Simo was the son of the village fletcher and learned how to use a bow with great discipline. When he was of age Simo joined other hunters from the village of which his brother Rianis was the lead hunter of the group. The two brothers were close but Simo's father had always seen Rianis as the stronger of the twins. Later in Simo's life his small village was attacked by a band of bandits lead by a vicious Orc named Yargol who set fire to the village after killing everyone including Rainis and Simo's father. Upon his dying breath his father gave Simo a bow which was to be Rainis's on his twenty-fifth birthday Simo took the bow and sworn he would get justice for his people and the orc named Yargol would meet his death at the tip of brother's bow.

Early Years - When Simo was a 17 he and his brother where tasked with gathering food from the neighboring fields and dense forests that surrounded the village seeing as both brothers Simo and Rainis's father was the village fletcher both excelled in using the bow and made sure every arrow released found it's mark. The years pasted by and Simo and Rainis's skills grew but Rainis began to favor blades and the rush of killing there prey up close it was messy and unnecessary in Simo's eyes but whatever it took to feed there people and bring home furs to trade. One day Rainis got in his mind that he would go off and kill a large wolf that had been in the area seeing it as a threat to the young bosmer who often played near the forest as well as there food supply Simo protested Rainis because in close combat the wolves size would prove to be a tough match even for a seasoned trapper but there was no detouring Rainis so the brothers left to find the wolf it took sometime but Simo found the trail and began tracking the wolf it was difficult to follow the trail because of the rain they had the night before but the beast was large and the markers it left on the game trails were hard to ignore but finally as the sun began to sink the brothers found themselves standing in the entrance of the massive wolves den Simo was uneasy for outside the den remains of past kills littered the ground and not all were of animals so were the remains of men. But Rainis had come this far the wolf would be his prize and bring him great honor. Standing ready to defend himself Simo drew back his bow and pointed in into the entrance dead locked and looking for any sign of movement in the dark cold den Rainis unsheathed his blade and called to the beast but there was no movement not a thing stirred within the den, suddenly a stick broke and before he could adjust his stance Simo taken of his feet while the two brothers where stalking the wolf the wolf had picked up there scent and had been lying in wait for the brother now on the ground Simo grabbed his bow but before he could ready an arrow the beast charged him all Simo could do was block with his bow the wolfs massive maw wrapped around the bow but Simo wasn't lucky enough to block the whole attack Simo rolled his face to the right and pushed with all his might but the beasts weight was to much and a fang sunk deep into his left cheek. With the beast distracted Rainis took full advantage and plunged his blade into the neck of the great wolf and twisted as deafening Howl let out and then the body of the beast went limp the great wolf was no more. The brothers returned dragging the wolves body back to the village Rainis was honored for his bravery and was showered with praise from there father Rainis had gotten his honor and glory while Simo was scarred the beast had left Simo's face with a trophy a reminder that stealth and cunning had outwitted the two mer Simo took this lesson to heart for if he ever forgot the next time he was caught off guard he'd be nothing more then another dead body and so he practiced the art of being unseen while in plain view until not even the most alert of creatures could sense his presence.

Best Memory - My first hunt

Worst Memory - The loss of his family and home

Skills - Mastery in archery, blades and the arts of stealth as well as a
self taught alchemist skilled in the specialties of poisons

Challenges for the Character - Find and kill all of the bandits who massacred his village and any who stand between him and the orc named Yargol

Weakness- Blinded by the loss of his family and home Simo's actions in the name of justice border on that of torture and whether there innocent of a crime if they have any information of Yargol or his band they will wish they hadn't

Birthsign - Serpent

Religious Views - The divines didn't help me then so why should I believe they'd help me now
This post was last modified: April 27th 2013, 01:09 PM by Simo Häyhä


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Wow the Character Bio forums are flooding with new and interesting characters, Brilliant ^-^.
Hail Justiciar Simo! welcome to the RP forums! i hope you enjoy it here! now on to the reason why i'm here! to review your character! i'll try and keep this as short but as detailed as i can :)

Right, a lot of people do this for there first bio so don't worry ^-^. you don't have to tell us a story for your characters back ground, we don't need to know every line of dialogue that people said, keep it detailed but don't give us info the reader doesn't need to know to understand your character better. do you see where i'm coming from? :). i think if you do remove the parts that we don't need to know you can make your bio pretty short! but don't threat my friend that only means you can add more! :D. now if you are attached to your story you can always post it on 'the library'.

Now lets think of things that we can add and expand upon shall we? What was the relationship like between Simo and his brother? a good siblin rivalry would be good! Here is a suggestion; you could have that your father loved Simo's eldar brother more and on Rianis's 25th birthday he was going to give him that familty air loome of a bow! now when the father sees that you survived and his favorite son has died! he'll tell you about the bow because it is his only choice! it will have the same theme as faramir from lord of the rings! you and your brother could love each other very much but due to the stress your father imposed on the both of you caused such a siblin rivalry! .... no that is but a suggestion, you can take that idea for free, change it up a bit or not use it at all! the choice is yours! ^-^

Right i'm going to talk to you now, not to your character. lets say you and your friend have just been out to town, maybe to have a bite to eat. and you and your friend make your way back home. when you arrive you see your street up in flames! and a few people outside with touches and blades! what would YOU do? i doubt you and your friend would take them head on! :P.
Yes, yes i know we make characters to be something that we arn't but keep that in mind! would the brothers fight these pillagers? would they try to sneak past them and look for there father? Keep in mind you are only a hunter and if one of these bandits get a luckly hit! its good night Vienna :P. you can have the same story, bandits burn villiage to the ground and Simo is the only survivor!

Right on you killing Yargol. by doing this you finish your characters story! he seems to have completed his mission and there is nothing more for him! if i were you i would keep Yargol alive or give your character a purpose after killing his family's killer.

Expand on challenges for your character and think of some weaknesses for him.

Any way well done for writing up this character! a good first draft! i hope to see this character grow and expand! ^-^


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Dear Quib,
thank you for the tips I took your advice and trimmed the fat off of my background story and edited it I also added a weakness to my bio and kept Yargol and his bandits alive for now >.>. let me know what you think of it and again thanks for the tips


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Oh wow! you haven't half trimmed of the fat, but now it a bit small :c. no worries the next part (i feel) is the funnest! now you just need to expand on the points you have created! try and get the reader to realte with him ^-^. I'll ask you some questions that will hopefully get you started.
How did Simo become a hunter? Did he want to become a hunter? What was his relationship with his father? What was Simo's relation ship like with his brother? how did Simo feel that his own father saw his brother as the better? was there any conflict while they were young because of this? like did you father give extra training to Rianis or special father son hunting trips? (and no i don't mean that in a dirty way! XP). for me i feel the relationship between you, your brother and your father is the best part! its the cause of conflict and your character may find out he misses his brother and father a lot more than he thought he would! also how did Rainis feel about being the favorite son? did he love it? or did he hate what it was doing to Simo?

Answer these question and with those answers you can truly flesh out your character a lot more ^-^ if you think of any more questions you could ask your character, do so! try and look at different scenarios in your characters shoes. i have created a thread about exactly that. http://www.tesof.com/topic-character-scenarios maybe it could help you add more depth?

anyway, really happy to see you work on your character! hopefully not far til he becomes something truly amazing! good luck ^-^


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(April 21st 2013, 01:36 PM)quib Wrote: Oh wow! you haven't half trimmed of the fat, but now it a bit small :c. no worries the next part (i feel) is the funnest! now you just need to expand on the points you have created! try and get the reader to realte with him ^-^. I'll ask you some questions that will hopefully get you started.
How did Simo become a hunter? Did he want to become a hunter? What was his relationship with his father? What was Simo's relation ship like with his brother? how did Simo feel that his own father saw his brother as the better? was there any conflict while they were young because of this? like did you father give extra training to Rianis or special father son hunting trips? (and no i don't mean that in a dirty way! XP). for me i feel the relationship between you, your brother and your father is the best part! its the cause of conflict and your character may find out he misses his brother and father a lot more than he thought he would! also how did Rainis feel about being the favorite son? did he love it? or did he hate what it was doing to Simo?

Answer these question and with those answers you can truly flesh out your character a lot more ^-^ if you think of any more questions you could ask your character, do so! try and look at different scenarios in your characters shoes. i have created a thread about exactly that. http://www.tesof.com/topic-character-scenarios maybe it could help you add more depth?

anyway, really happy to see you work on your character! hopefully not far til he becomes something truly amazing! good luck ^-^

I added some more and will be adding more soon thanks again for the tips


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