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Noric Alabane and the Journey of A Life Time Part 1


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The Alik'r deserts piercing sun fell upon Noric's hard burnt face. "Why did I ever decide to go through the Alik'r. Oh yeah because that foolish redguard said it's the quickest way there." Noric stumbled to the desert floor having traveled for countless hours in the blazing sun trying to find his way to Hegathe in order to catch a ship and join up with his brother and sister for her wedding in Stros M'kai. Noric pulled out his water skin and tipped it upside down hoping to find a drink waiting for him. But there wasn't all there was where a few grains of sand. Out of frustration Noric flung the water skin into the desert. "By divines sake why must she be married in Stros M'kai. Whats so special about an island made of sand and rock." Noric got up and then began to walk more hours and by nightfall he could see Hegathe in the moonlight, which he then sprouted a smile " Tomorrow I shall fave the biggest feast any one shall ever see. Noric unrolled his cot and took off his satchel of supplies and rested till the sun came up.
Noric felt cold metal on him and heard unexpected voice "Well look what has wandered up in the sand." Noric shot open his eyes only too see a tall Redguard with his scimitar on Norics throat and a orc looking into his eyes. "Looks like we've got a Brenton. Guess you were right he not a nord." Spoke the orc tossing a small satchel of gold torwards the regard. No doubt Norics though. "On your knees now." commanded the orc who already had his hands on Norics collar and was pulling him to his feet then hitting in his thigh making him drop to his knees. Gur-dock watch him I'll search the rest of his gear. This was the prime opportunity for Noric. They stripped him of all his weaponry but they missed the small dagger strapped to the inside of his boot. Noric swiftly grabbed for the knife and as he was about to plunge it into the orcs chest he fell flat on top of Noric, sending the knife out of his hand. Noric left out a great amount of air hardly able to breathe. He then heard another the redguard drop to his knees and spoke in a hushed tone "No" and then fell to the ground.
Noric squirmed to get free fearing who ever killed those two will come for him next. But instead of feeling a blade slicing into him he felt a relief of pressure. He then rolled over to be met by dark blue eyes staring down on him while the rest the the mans face was covered by a turban and mask only to then feel something furry brush against leg. Noric looked down to see a Khajiits tail swaying back and forth. The mysterious Khajiit stepped back a bit and held out his hand. Noric cautiously took the khajiit hand and got back on his feet. The khajiit rummaged around in his bag and pulled out a canteen. Noric graciously took the canteen and nodded in thanks tworards the khajiit. He easily had drank at least half the canteen in a few seconds.Mid way through the rest of the water the khajiit pulled down his mask and said, "My name is Zar'Karri. Might know who you are?" Noric wiped his mouth with the back of his hand and replied "I'm Noric Alabane, thank you for everything." He then handed back the canteen which was almost empty now. "No problem only a few arrows. Now the bandits up there, they were a problem". Said Zar'Karri pointing to a cliff not far back. "These ones must have been from there as well. Might I ask where you are headed Noric." Noric knowing he could now trust the khajiit said "For Stros M'kai. My sister is being wed there." "Ah, so is Zar."Zar said,"I hope to catch a ship there and head to the Summerset Isles." "Why not go to Valenwood a get on a ship there."Asked Noric "Well they don't take to kindly to me after I climbed one of their precious trees and broke a branch along the way."Replied Zar. At that moment both men broke out laughing. "Well guess we should start heading towards Hegathe if we want to make it in time for the next ship." Noric agreed with Zar and they then left on their way to Hegathe.

Please give feedback this is my first story and I enjoyed writing it.
This post was last modified: July 25th 2013, 07:40 PM by Noric the Oblivious


When Shadows Fall We Will Rise.

Noric Alabane - A Brenton scout who has had a terrible past
Zar'Karri - A wandering khajiit who wants to find his sister
Mira Mournshade - A dunmer assassin who seek revenge for her father
Whispers-With-Trees - An argonian slave who escaped and befriended Mira






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A solid first story Noric!

It establishes, somewhat comically, why he is where he is, and introduces his relationship with this mysterious khajiit who rescued him. It seems the two have a bit of an adventure ahead of them before they reach their destination!

I would say however, that if you split the story up into a couple of paragraphs then it would be easier to read. A common thing to do is hit the enter key whenever someone different speaks a line. This will keep things clear!

Anyways I look forward to reading more about Noric and his newfound companion as they make their way across the Alik'r (or beyond!)


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Thanks I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the tips.


When Shadows Fall We Will Rise.

Noric Alabane - A Brenton scout who has had a terrible past
Zar'Karri - A wandering khajiit who wants to find his sister
Mira Mournshade - A dunmer assassin who seek revenge for her father
Whispers-With-Trees - An argonian slave who escaped and befriended Mira






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