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Ode to Nerevarine


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My father's father's father just won't die
(Ode to Nerevarine)

My father's father told me of his dad
Who walked the winds and had no bed
He stood with gods and called them false
When the unmourned showed no remorse.

And from the gardens of the mad
Up to the island of undead,
From every House and every tent
A whisper dawns him "Incarnate"!

Like a Daedra soul must feast
on mortals dreams, he's bound to east.
Yet cursed by choked black sky
My father's father's father just won't die!
This post was last modified: February 18th 2013, 09:56 AM by Aristeus
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This certainly has the feel of an ode about a mythic sort of character, occasionally sung by common folk over a hearth.

After a few hundred years, I wonder if the Nerevarine still lives and if he someday will return to cast out the "outlanders" as the ashlanders foretold. In the 4th era, this being the argonian invaders. I hold onto the hope that the Nerevarine isn't dead!


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Awesome! You make me want to try my hand at TES-themed poetry. :)

It seems like you're going for Trochaic Octameter throughout except for the first and last lines, which have 2 extra sylables each... maybe it should be your grandfather and not your great-grandfather? In each case, the extra "father" kind of wrecks your metere. Up to you, of course; just thought I'd point it out.

I like it a lot though; and @Horizon Seeker nice comments like always.


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Thank you both for the kind words.
In truth I wasn't going for Trochaic, the poems I usually write are free verse and metrically free, yet, English not being my first language, English words do not have true meaning to me, they're just sounds and I got carried away with the music (if that makes any sense).
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