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Shakir


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Firstname - Shakir
Title - Dar
Sex - Male
Age - 25
Occupation - Mercenary Scout/Thief
Faction - Freelancer.



Appearance - He was a young, would have greyish and white fur, not very tall, and a naive Khajiit. He wore a red Alik'r hood. Brought to him by a mercenary when he was journeying through Hammerfell.
He has a chipped tooth and a scratched cut ear.
He always seems to have a smirk or an apple near him.

Personality - He was naive, young and impulsively. He would attack anyone insulting him and would try to flirt with every attractive girl he would find as his old friends taught him. Not knowing that his friends had no idea how to flirt themselves. He was still loyal to the people paying him and would not take kindly to betrayal, holding a grudge for days. He was kind at heart and loved telling stories, as such the cubs back in Senchal loved him.

Social Background/Backstory - He was a thief, a orphan. Both his parents and siblings dying with the plague. He prayed to the moons for someone to take him from his personal hell but nothing would. In the end he trained himself, watched warriors fight and copied their moves. Beating anyone that followed him or wanted him hurt. He learned how to jump, be quick on his toes and be nimble. He'd run across rooftops or leap into windows.
He had a gigantic journey when he was 22. Leaving Senchal for the first time and being hurt multiple times. He in the end returned finally when he was 24 to the city he loved and hated. He told his story to many people, finally settling down. But after a few months. The boredom grew on him with every hour being a pain to his own mind, in the end he jumped at the first chance of mercenary work. Running towards Orcrest.

Best Memory - Being fed as a small, starving cub. He would always try to find the Khajiit that fed him, it was one of the few things that saved his life.

Worst Memory - Being stabbed in the stomach in a ritualistic sacrifice, he was bounded as such could not stop the assailant.

Skills - He was quick and nimble. He could climb almost any tree or wall. He would be skilled slightly in dagger fighting and unarmed combat. He had a bow, but was not qualified enough to use it in the best condition.

Challenges for the Character - He is naive, impulsive and lonely. He would try to find the man that fed him and could easily get into a fight.
He could not fight in a duel as he would easily be destroyed by a professional duelist.

Birthsign The Lady

Religious Views He worships Ban Daar and Alkosh. He prays to the moons for help.

Politics Views None, he knows nothing of politics and never asks.
This post was last modified: April 11th 2013, 11:43 AM by Kolovsky
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Brilliant bio, he's not that bad at flirting XD. But yeah, really good!
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Hehe. Thanks! :D
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I like it :D
I also like how the ending of the backstory ended with him running to Orcrest :3
Don't worry, he'll get a reward, and imagine all the apples he could buy! XDD


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Jesus Christ, APPLES! Haha, Also. Go to the Storytelling Section, I'm writing a... story about him. :D
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Hail Dar'Shakir! cool character, i like that he is young and head strong. but GODS do i love that he trained himself! ok, i think you can really make him epic if you expand on this ^-^, i'll give some advice, whether or not you take it is tottally up to you :), Him training himself is brilliant, i think you should talk about the weaknesses of this! he saw people and copied their moves, what do you mean by this? you know copying a knight fight is a lot different than copying a drunk man in a bar fight don't you think? maybe he was a fan of gladiators and he managed to sneak into the shows and watched his favorite fighters? or maybe it was from the help of books! the elderscrolls is famous for books teaching your character skills and yet no one (as of yet i think) has made a character where they trained via books!
now onto weaknesses, there are too weaknesses i think of the top of my head for this, one is when your copying someone you might not copy them exactly right and miss out important little details (like putting your back into certain strikes or you don't use the correct posture when weilding a sword which). the second weakness is, if you copy someone move for move you'll copy what ever weakness they have
Lastly on the topic of trianing yourself, i'm not fond of the line 'Beating anyone that followed him or wanted him hurt', nobody is perfect and a selftrained (cat) man will run into troubles at times!

your bio sets the scene but what is your characters purpose? what does he want? why does he want it?

overall a pretty good first draft! i hope to see this character grow and expand to something truely awesome!


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I'll try to expand on self-trained, but on the 'Beating anyone that followed him or wanted him hurt'. I mostly meant bullies, and since Bullies weren't training themselves at all, even watching others fight or reading books taught Shakir how to be better than them as such beating them.
I could change the bio a bit more, with him reading books and such, but because of him being an orphan I imagined him as illiterate. I can change it, since training with books is quite new and ingenious.
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Great character :D
This post was last modified: April 25th 2013, 11:18 AM by Archmage Alator


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