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Tahlzim Draconis - The Grieving Mercenary


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Name: Tahlzim Draconis

Sex: Male

Age: 53

Occupation: Former Vampire Hunter/Mercenary

Faction: Aldmeri Dominion

Appearance: Average height for an Altmer, short hair and full beard/mustache. For an Altmer, he is fairly muscular, most likely a result of his preference of sword and arrows over spell.

Personality: The only way to describe his personality is rough at best. He tends to be a hothead at times, but he is fiercely loyal to those who prove they can be trusted.

Background: Tahlzim left the Summerset Isles with his sister when they were in there 20’s. They lusted for a life that they could not find at home. They longed for adventure and daring, a life by the sword and not one of books and training as a mage. They found this life as mercenaries, guarding merchants on trade routes and ships, as well as clearing out bandit camps.

The switch from mercenary to vampire hunter came at the price of a life. When Tahlzim and his sister reached the location of a group of highly aggressive bandits, they were met with a surprise. The camp had already been cleared out by vampires. In the ensuing fight, Tahlzim’s sister lost her life, and he nearly lost his and would have if it had not been for the hunters that showed up and killed the intruders.

This secret group of vampire hunters, who simply called themselves “The Order Of Moonlight” took him in, and seeing that he thirsted for vengeance, trained him to hunt and fight vampires, gave him the tools he needed to fight, and a secret weapon. They gave him heightened senses, strength and speed by sharing with him the blood of the werewolf, which allowed them to do battle without fear of infection, but also with increased skill. He wore the fangs of his fallen enemies around his neck as trophies, and as a constant reminder of why and how he lost his sister.

The Order eventually disbanded, and Tahlzim returned home to the Summerset Isles. Still not content with life as he knows it now, he waits patiently knowing that some conflict will arise that will give him purpose and meaning again. Even though his lust for vengeance has been satisfied, he still mourns the loss of his sister, and he seeks to honor her through his life, a life by the sword.

Best Memory: His first bandit raid with his sister.

Worst Memory: Losing his sister to vampires, watching her die.

Skills: Tahlzim is a skilled archer and swordsman. He has also taken to smithing.

Challenges: The memory of his sister is what keeps him strong. It pushes him to continue in his training, and never grow soft. This memory also fills him with guilt and grief over the loss. It has made him more volatile and unpredictable. His biggest challenge with all of this is to keep control over his emotions. With the blood of the wolf boiling beneath the surface, it is imperative that he not give into those feelings of grief, guilt, or even anger, all of which could produce potentially deadly circumstances.

Religion: Tahlzim recognizes the Eight Divines and acknowledges their place among humanity, but he has taken more to Hircine. He believes that his lycanthropy is not a disease but a gift given only to the strong. He longs for a life of battle and triumph and believes that even in death, he will be given that by Hircine. So he seeks to always be strong, and to always be in tune with the wolf inside him, so that he will be ready when his day comes. He seeks to honor his gift through ferocity battle, reaching heights of strength rarely seen in any man or mer, and even calling on the blood of the beast when needed.

Concerning Tahlzim's Surname: "Draconis" is an imperial family name found in Oblivion. There were two members of that family that stuck out to me the most. One was Caelia Draconis and the other was Sibylla Draconis. Both of these women went against the grain of natural society, Caelia being a bit of a tomboy and always getting into scuffles as a child, and Sibylla living wild in a cave.

I decided to take a little creative liberty, and assume that the Draconis name would have been around at the time of ESO, and that some of the family may have had the same characteristics. With that said, Tahlzim and his sister met members of this family, who were also mercenaries at the time, who took them in and showed them the ropes, securing contracts, protecting caravans and ships, etc. They assumed, or rather were accepted into the family and took on the surname as their own.
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A solid Lycanthrope character, which is cool. The backstory and personality are well fleshed out, and he has a weakness that can be utilized easily. My only advice would be: USE that weakness, and use it as a weakness, not as a strength. Too often I'll see "weaknesses" like this used as fuel for a character to go postal and slaughter a bunch of enemies and then kind of feel bad or scared afterwards. That's all fine once in awhile, but now your character is approaching God mode: He either fights normally or fights like a superhuman, and that's it.

My apologies as I'm new to this forum, and I haven't read any of your posts, but this is my 2 cents for whatever it's worth.
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(May 20th 2013, 02:38 PM)AluminumKnight Wrote: A solid Lycanthrope character, which is cool. The backstory and personality are well fleshed out, and he has a weakness that can be utilized easily. My only advice would be: USE that weakness, and use it as a weakness, not as a strength. Too often I'll see "weaknesses" like this used as fuel for a character to go postal and slaughter a bunch of enemies and then kind of feel bad or scared afterwards. That's all fine once in awhile, but now your character is approaching God mode: He either fights normally or fights like a superhuman, and that's it.

My apologies as I'm new to this forum, and I haven't read any of your posts, but this is my 2 cents for whatever it's worth.

Thanks for your feedback! I was hoping that I portrayed him as a character who is a bit of a hot head, but knows that he can't let his emotions rule him, especially with his "gift". His daily struggle is twofold when it comes to that weakness: 1. Do not let the guilt/emotions over the loss of his sister rule his heart and 2. Use the memory of his sister to be vigilant. Striking a balance between remembering and not being overtaken is ultimately what his life has come down to. I hope that makes sense. I certainly don't want to go for God mode. As you said, he has a weaknes that can be exploited, and anyone who becomes overridden with emotion is known to make mistakes and get sloppy. He is known to be volatile and wreckless even, but he isn't beyond meeting an untimely end for lack of judgement.
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Quite an unfortunate surprise to find your target already dealt with by something much worse. It's clear in your character's background that his sister was dear to him; they left their home together to live the same life, and fought side by side. After her death, he continues to remember her rather simply move on with his life. It forms an interesting grief-afflicted character. I wonder if he has considered that he won't "see" her again as his afterlife is committed to Hircine's realm-- well, perhaps that's not the way he sees things. But that might be something dynamic to think about.

I've noticed however that in your two character bios you have given your Altmer high-fantasy surnames of Draconis and Sunstriker. Most Altmer however do not normally possess last names, and instead have only single unique names. There are some rare exceptions of course, for one reason or the other-- though I don't believe any of these would occur in Altmer born in the Summerset society. More information on that can be found at http://uesp.net/wiki/Lore:Altmer_Names

That's not to say you can't maintain these last names still! But it may be best to provide some sort of reasoning for them to have one that differentiates them from other High Elves.

Anyways, looking forward to seeing how Tahlzim faces upcoming conflicts, and the Alliance War!
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(May 20th 2013, 10:53 PM)Horizon Seeker Wrote: Quite an unfortunate surprise to find your target already dealt with by something much worse. It's clear in your character's background that his sister was dear to him; they left their home together to live the same life, and fought side by side. After her death, he continues to remember her rather simply move on with his life. It forms an interesting grief-afflicted character. I wonder if he has considered that he won't "see" her again as his afterlife is committed to Hircine's realm-- well, perhaps that's not the way he sees things. But that might be something dynamic to think about.

I've noticed however that in your two character bios you have given your Altmer high-fantasy surnames of Draconis and Sunstriker. Most Altmer however do not normally possess last names, and instead have only single unique names. There are some rare exceptions of course, for one reason or the other-- though I don't believe any of these would occur in Altmer born in the Summerset society. More information on that can be found at http://uesp.net/wiki/Lore:Altmer_Names

That's not to say you can't maintain these last names still! But it may be best to provide some sort of reasoning for them to have one that differentiates them from other High Elves.

Anyways, looking forward to seeing how Tahlzim faces upcoming conflicts, and the Alliance War!

Thank you for your feedback! I greatly appreciate it and the link to the list of lore altmer names. Perhaps I should've explained in both of my character bios that the surnames were assumed at later times but I will explain here:

"Sunstriker" is less of a surname and more of a title given to him by his superiors. I envisoned him as a templarish type of character wielding light and the power of the sun against his foes. So he was awarded that title based on his combat skillset and abilities. He could just as well be called Aelzim the Sunstriker instead of simply Aelzim Sunstriker.

"Draconis" is an imperial family name found in Oblivion. There were two members of that family that stuck out to me the most. One was Caelia Draconis and the other was Sibylla Draconis. Both of these women went against the grain of natural society, Caelia being a bit of a tomboy and always getting into scuffles as a child, and Sibylla living wild in a cave.

I decided to take a little creative liberty, and assume that the Draconis name would have been around at the time of ESO, and that some of the family may have had the same characteristics. With that said, Tahlzim and his sister met members of this family, who were also mercenaries at the time, who took them in and showed them the ropes, securing contracts, protecting caravans and ships, etc. They assumed, or rather were accepted into the family and took on the surname as their own.

His sister does mean a lot to him. I wanted to portray in him what some of us may go through, including myself, at the loss of a close family member. His character shows the importance of properly grieving and letting go, and the effects and/or consequences of not (minus the whole turning into a giant furry rage monster).Tahlzim has also given thought to the fact that he won't see his sister in the afterlife, being destined for Hircine's realm, and that is part of his conflict. He has already settled on his fate, but knows that it means never seeing her again, unless through some strange necromancy. Either way, he will have to come to terms with this fact or be grief stricken for all eternity.


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(May 20th 2013, 10:53 PM)Horizon Seeker Wrote: Quite an unfortunate surprise to find your target already dealt with by something much worse. It's clear in your character's background that his sister was dear to him; they left their home together to live the same life, and fought side by side. After her death, he continues to remember her rather simply move on with his life. It forms an interesting grief-afflicted character. I wonder if he has considered that he won't "see" her again as his afterlife is committed to Hircine's realm-- well, perhaps that's not the way he sees things. But that might be something dynamic to think about.

I've noticed however that in your two character bios you have given your Altmer high-fantasy surnames of Draconis and Sunstriker. Most Altmer however do not normally possess last names, and instead have only single unique names. There are some rare exceptions of course, for one reason or the other-- though I don't believe any of these would occur in Altmer born in the Summerset society. More information on that can be found at http://uesp.net/wiki/Lore:Altmer_Names

That's not to say you can't maintain these last names still! But it may be best to provide some sort of reasoning for them to have one that differentiates them from other High Elves.

Anyways, looking forward to seeing how Tahlzim faces upcoming conflicts, and the Alliance War!

Thank you for your feedback! I greatly appreciate it and the link to the list of lore altmer names. Perhaps I should've explained in both of my character bios that the surnames were assumed at later times but I will explain here:

"Sunstriker" is less of a surname and more of a title given to him by his superiors. I envisoned him as a templarish type of character wielding light and the power of the sun against his foes. So he was awarded that title based on his combat skillset and abilities. He could just as well be called Aelzim the Sunstriker instead of simply Aelzim Sunstriker.

"Draconis" is an imperial family name found in Oblivion. There were two members of that family that stuck out to me the most. One was Caelia Draconis and the other was Sibylla Draconis. Both of these women went against the grain of natural society, Caelia being a bit of a tomboy and always getting into scuffles as a child, and Sibylla living wild in a cave.

I decided to take a little creative liberty, and assume that the Draconis name would have been around at the time of ESO, and that some of the family may have had the same characteristics. With that said, Tahlzim and his sister met members of this family, who were also mercenaries at the time, who took them in and showed them the ropes, securing contracts, protecting caravans and ships, etc. They assumed, or rather were accepted into the family and took on the surname as their own.

His sister does mean a lot to him. I wanted to portray in him what some of us may go through, including myself, at the loss of a close family member. His character shows the importance of properly grieving and letting go, and the effects and/or consequences of not (minus the whole turning into a giant furry rage monster).Tahlzim has also given thought to the fact that he won't see his sister in the afterlife, being destined for Hircine's realm, and that is part of his conflict. He has already settled on his fate, but knows that it means never seeing her again, unless through some strange necromancy. Either way, he will either have to come to terms with this fact or be grief stricken for all eternity.


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A solid set of explanations for the title and surname. I'm sure they would be great additions to add to your bios! Also glad to see you've put a lot of thought and consideration into your characters, a nice bit of depth to have with Tahlzim!


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(May 21st 2013, 07:49 PM)Horizon Seeker Wrote: A solid set of explanations for the title and surname. I'm sure they would be great additions to add to your bios! Also glad to see you've put a lot of thought and consideration into your characters, a nice bit of depth to have with Tahlzim!

Thanks man! I appreciate that! Perhaps tomorrow when I have more time, I'll find a place to squeeze those explanations into the bios, because I'm sure others would/could be wondering the same things. Tahlzim is my favorite creation thus far (I have others that I have not published here). He will most likely be making the first appearance as one of my characters in ESO. I'm hoping to get some artwork done on him througout the week, and at the very least a decent screenshot from Skyrim or something.
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